Many parents complain that computer games have no value to their chuldren’s Study. On the contrary , those online games have produced a lot of negative effect on their mental and physical development. What is your opinion
Video
games
have become more popular with the rise in technology, people
of every age play video
games
today. Many parents complain that computer
games
have no value to their children’s study
and have affected their children's mental and physical development. I disagree with this
statement, as I am neutral towards this
topic.
Video
games
these days have a lot of influence on a normal mind, which could be a bad thing if taken the wrong way. I've had similar experiences and have seen people
behave weirdly after several years of playing computer
games
. Another negative effect of gaming would be addiction which could lead people
not getting involved in any physical activities and hence
, causing physical issues like back pain. Computer
games
have also
provided a platform for scammers and predators who are looking for vulnerable targets to make quick money.
With every disadvantage comes advantages, while
video
games
have a lot of cons, they also
have a lot of pros. Studies suggest that people
who play video
games
have a better reaction time than those who do not. Furthermore
, computer
games
also
provide life-like experiences with realistic simulators that have been developed over the years. Many people
have their lives turned around because of the career opportunities in e-sports and streaming computer
games
while
also
helping people
show their talents. Games
like Minecraft also
have education modes which are used in schools which help students learn in a better and more creative way. Moreover
, computer
games
also
have parental control which can help parents limit how much time their children play and what content children are allowed to see.
To conclude
, computer
games
have both advantages and disadvantages. I think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages provided that the child has a safe environment.Submitted by satyarthverma88 on
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task achievement
Try to state your position more clearly. Being 'neutral' may make your essay seem less decisive, which can impact the strength of your argument.
coherence cohesion
Develop your paragraphs more fully. Aim for more detail supporting your points, and try to make your ideas flow more seamlessly.
coherence cohesion
Be careful with your sentence structure and language. Avoid using colloquial language (e.g., 'I've had similar experiences') in formal essays.
task achievement
Your essay covers both sides of the argument, showing a balanced understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
The concluding paragraph effectively sums up your main points.
Fully explain your ideas
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