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Some musemes charge for admissions while other for free Doyou think that advance for charging over weight the dis advantages

#musemes #charge #admissions #doyou #advance #weight #dis
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The
adminstration
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administration
 of
museums
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 is different from one country to
other
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, especially,
about
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regarding
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 charging their services to
vistors
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visitors
 or not
,
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So that some
countries
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country's
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museum
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museums
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 are
charging
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charged
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while
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ather
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others
are
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is
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for
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apply
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free.
Although
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 not charging the
museums
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increase
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increases
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number
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the number
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 of
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vistorts
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visitors
, which
lead
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leads
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 to
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increase
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an increase
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the
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in the
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 historical
Knowladge
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knowledge
 among citizens. It may
lead to
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put
pressure
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 on employees Despite
of
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this
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 imposing money on it leads to prosperity and
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increase
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increased
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forgien
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foreign
 currency.
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,personally
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personally
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 I feel that imposing money on
museums
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is
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better than not charging it . On the
on
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one
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 hand ,I
condcede
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concede
 that free charging increases the data information among
citzens
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citizens
. As it gives the ability to all people from
different
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a different
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class
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classes
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 to go there
,
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and attend it :The poor and rich can attend it
esaily
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easily
 without any obstacle ,so that the
historicalinformation
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historical information
 can easily spread among the citizens.
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, increasing the
number
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 of
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vistorts
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visitors
 leads to
put
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putting
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pressure
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 on the employees there :As they will need more effort to give the
vistorts
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 their requried service: As the musem will not kept organised or cleaned because of the high demanded on it: The place will be full of chaos
due to
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 the large
number
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 of visitors,which put hudge
pressure
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 on the workrs But if there is ticktes for musem it will lead to
increase
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 the GDP of the states ,and attract the forgien currency for countries .Some countries its economic and welfare depends on the historical places like
museums
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 ,so if they stoped charging it ,
this
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 will lead to
increase
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 poverty: The economic of the third nations like: Egypte depend on it . To sum extent, its economy depends on historicalplaces like:polar musem ,which hudge
number
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 of
vistorts
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 come to visit it to enjoy,so that it provide the country with forgien currency ,which leads to
increase
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 prosperity of state ,and its GDP In conclusion,
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 I admit that free admission increases the awrance of historicalKnowladge ,place ,It is useless for nations and employees. :As it will put
pressure
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 on works and decline the welfare of state .personally I believethat the advantages of charging admission is more than not charging it.
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