Some musemes charge for admissions while other for free Doyou think that advance for charging over weight the dis advantages

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administration
of
museums
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other
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charging their services to
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visitors
or not
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countries
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museum
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are
charging
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while
ather
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others
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for
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free.
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not charging the
museums
increase
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number
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of
vistorts
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visitors
, which
lead
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to
increase
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the
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historical
Knowladge
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knowledge
among citizens. It may
lead to
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put
pressure
on employees Despite
of
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this
imposing money on it leads to prosperity and
increase
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forgien
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foreign
currency.
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personally
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I feel that imposing money on
museums
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better than not charging it . On the
on
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one
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hand ,I
condcede
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concede
that free charging increases the data information among
citzens
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citizens
. As it gives the ability to all people from
different
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class
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to go there
,
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and attend it :The poor and rich can attend it
esaily
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easily
without any obstacle ,so that the
historicalinformation
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historical information
can easily spread among the citizens.
However
, increasing the
number
of
vistorts
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visitors
leads to
put
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pressure
on the employees there :As they will need more effort to give the
vistorts
their requried service: As the musem will not kept organised or cleaned because of the high demanded on it: The place will be full of chaos
due to
the large
number
of visitors,which put hudge
pressure
on the workrs But if there is ticktes for musem it will lead to
increase
the GDP of the states ,and attract the forgien currency for countries .Some countries its economic and welfare depends on the historical places like
museums
,so if they stoped charging it ,
this
will lead to
increase
poverty: The economic of the third nations like: Egypte depend on it . To sum extent, its economy depends on historicalplaces like:polar musem ,which hudge
number
of
vistorts
come to visit it to enjoy,so that it provide the country with forgien currency ,which leads to
increase
prosperity of state ,and its GDP In conclusion,
Although
I admit that free admission increases the awrance of historicalKnowladge ,place ,It is useless for nations and employees. :As it will put
pressure
on works and decline the welfare of state .personally I believethat the advantages of charging admission is more than not charging it.
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