The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts depict information about the key reasons for tourists arriving in Orange City in 2006 and 2016.
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, a significant amount of visitors came to the country for annual events in both years
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the popularity of restaurants increased massively in 2016.
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the observations, the highest
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of tourists (nearly half of the visitors) visited the country in 2006 for annual events at 45% followed by museum visits at 27%The restaurants and
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other reasons recorded the lowest
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at 10% and 5% respectively When considering the year 2016, nearly half of the foreigners visited the country for restaurants (41%) which was 4 times higher than the figures in 2006. ,
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, the recorded amount for museums saw a considerable drop from 27% in 2006 to only 11% in 2016. The second highest
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of tourists in 2016 was recorded for annual events at 32%
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a similar
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accounted for theatre and other reasons at 8%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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