Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case ? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development ?

Smartphones have become an addiction nowadays

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for young ones. It has become a debatable topic whether spending a lot of time on smartphones is beneficial or harmful for children.

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essay will present the causes for

this

along with

my opinion. To commence with, one of the possible reasons

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that in present times there are

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playgrounds available for kids because of

construction

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the construction

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of more residential buildings.

Secondly

, parents usually do not allow children to play outside as the crime rate has

been significantly risen

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in recent times. Another reason could be online classes and homework which

also

increases the screen duration.

Furthermore

,

videogames

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video games

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and social media

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so captivating that pupils

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to allocate more of their leisure time

playing

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and surfing online. To my way of thinking, it is more of a negative development as giving more time to screens weakens the

eye-sight

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eyesight

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.

Besides

, they

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interest in

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world

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results

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a lack

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of

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their

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apply

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social life and relations.

Moreover

, smartphones

tends

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to be not only addictive but

also

deminish

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diminish

the focusing ability of

brain

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by

interferring

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interfering

with

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cognition system.

To conclude

, There are some factors like

availability

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the availability

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of playgrounds,

parents

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parental

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restrictions and classes on

computer

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a computer

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that adds to screen-timing but it is an undeniable fact that spending long hours on mobile phones alters the human brain power and eye-sight

as well as

affects their social life.