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Now adays the population of young people is more than old people in the countries. And it benefit us To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been found that the
population
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 count of the younger
population
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 is comparatively more than that of the older generation. In my opinion, it has more drawbacks than benefits to offer to the community or a country. 
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 with, the
countries
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 with more adult citizens benefit from the fact that the more working
population
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 they have, the more success they will attract in order of the country's GDP and
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 economic growth.
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,
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countries
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 with strong economic conditions hold the excellent power to suppress and impact the international trade industry.
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, nations with lower age group residents face the issue of shortage of skilled and unskilled labour, Canada and Japan are the best examples as the nations considered facing
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 problems.
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, having more old-aged residents in the nation offers multiple benefits,
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, increased moral values and a code of conduct among the
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,especially, younger kids and working adults. Without it, one can notice the elevated rate of crime and disrespectful behaviour among the people, to exemplify, in
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 like India and Japan, where everyone respects and lives with their parents, and experiences a community
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 more grounded and attached to their roots and cultures.,
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 people show humanity through being patient, helpful and responsible towards social issues.
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,
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 the younger generation has the capabilities to bring success to their respective
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, it should not be forgotten that without older people, the country can lose its uniqueness
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 reflected through the values and morals cherished by its
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demographic shift
  • Dynamic workforce
  • Economic growth
  • Innovation
  • Adaptable culture
  • Technological advancements
  • Educational systems
  • Quality education
  • Competition for jobs
  • Professional development
  • Healthcare systems
  • Public spending
  • Cultural shifts
  • Progressive attitudes
  • Social issues
  • Intergenerational tension
  • Policy changes
  • Entrepreneurial spirit
  • Economic diversity
  • Dependency ratio
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