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Task 1: The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the number of renewable
energy
 in the total
evergy
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energy
 supply in Australia,
Sweden
, Iceland, and Turkey between 1997 and 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
Iceland
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Iceland's
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mojority
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majority
steady
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 increased over the period,
while
 Turkey was fluctuated between 1997 and 2010. The proportion of
energy
 in Australia was a drop slightly for three years which are 1997, 2000 and 2010,
however
,
Sweden
steady soar
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steadily soared
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 over the period given. The proportion of renewable
energy
 in Iceland was over
the
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40% in 1997, Increasing
significant
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significantly
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almost
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to almost
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 60% in 2000,
kept
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and kept
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 going up to just 70%
at the end
 of
year
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the year
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. The second biggest proportion of Turkey started under 40% in 1997, climbing up slightly
40
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% in the middle of
year
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the year
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,
in
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and in
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 2010, declined
just
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to just
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 over 30%. The number of using
energy
 started lower than other countries, with around 9% in 1997, and
left
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in the last
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 two years fell
down
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apply
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respectively, with around 8% and almost 5%.
On the other hand
,
Sweden
 can be seen opposite with Australia. The number of
Sweden
 was around 5% in 1997,
slight
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slightly
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 increasing
just
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to just
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 6%,
went
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and went
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 up
almost
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to almost
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 9% in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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