The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012.
The given chart illustrates several adjustments that occurred in 3 particular areas of crime in Newport city
center
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between 2003 and 2012.
Overall
, the most noticeable change was seen in the
numbers
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number
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of
burglary
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burglaries
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,
whereas
the number of
robbery
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held steady at approximately 500
incidents
during
this
period. In 2003, the majority
crime
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cases belonged to burglary, with a total number of 3400
incidents
. What’s more, in 2004 burglary saw an exponential rise with 3700 reported cases.
However
, from 2004 till 2008 the figure encountered
drastic
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decline with just 1000
incidents
. In the following years, there was spotted only a minimal change. In 2003, the number of car
theft
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held fairly steady at around 2600 till 2004. In 2005, it saw a marginal decrease, from 2600 to only 2000 reported
incidents
.
Nevertheless
, beginning with 2006, a minor growth was noticed. The
amount
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of
incidents
that occurred in robbery accounted for a considerably lower proportion, held steady at approximately 500 reported cases.
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