The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs describe
percentage
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the percentage
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of families with three common electrical devices and
number
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of hours spent doing household chores during 99
years
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year
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period. As can be seen from the given line charts, all
the
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three electrical appliances saw a significantly increased
ownership
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in the population and time used for housework
show
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a dramatical decrease. It's noticeable that in 1920 most families did not
owner
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a refrigerator,
however
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,
washing
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the washing
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machine was the primary
ownership
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of
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the
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appliances in
household
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the household
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, which is about 40%.
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Further more
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, vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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is
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were
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also
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correspondingly common in 1920, which is about 30%. On the one hand,
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washing
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the washing
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machine was the most common appliance in
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the household
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household
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households
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in 1920, it
keep
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steady and after 1960 it became the least common appliance among all three devices.
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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saw a most dramatic increase, it
becam
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became
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ownership
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around 1945, and almost reached 100% in 1980.
And by
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2000,
almsot
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almost
all the family
possess
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possessed
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vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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. With consistently increased
ownership
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of
appliance
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appliances
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, there is a visible fall in time used doing housework, it saw a dramatic decrease from 50 to 10
hour
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hours
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per week approximately in the given pe
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ownership with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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