many museums charge for admission while others are free. doyou think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweight the disadvantages?

A large number of
art
galleries allow the entrance of visitors through paid
tickets
but some
museums
offer free admission to individuals.
I
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my opinion,
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the advantages
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advantages
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of setting
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charges
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charge
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on
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museums
, outweigh its disadvantages.
To begin
with,
money
collected through
tickets
can be used for the development of
museums
in ample different ways. To elaborate,
money
saved from paid
tickets
,
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can be
further
used to bring unique
art
pieces
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art
galleries, which are costly and management alone cannot afford those without the contribution of people.
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,
increase
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in
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of
artifacts
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, historical paintings, scriptures,
tools
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and tools
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from
past
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,
etecetera
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etcetera
can help research
students
, who visit
museums
to gain vast knowledge about their history.
Moreover
, the amount of
money
spent by people on
tickets
can be used to provide facilities to
public
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the public
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.
Such
as
clean
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environment, food, water facilities, toilets, parking, and staff assistance.
For instance
, so many
museums
with charged
tickets
, provide free books, magazines, photographs, and maps to children or to
students
to develop their interest towards
art
and history.
Also
,
money
given by people can be used to build movie rooms and artificial
art
objects to provide in-depth knowledge to individuals. Contrarily, applying fares
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entrance
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can cause concern for some
population
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populations
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.
For example
, poor
students
, who cannot afford paid
tickets
cannot enjoy
leraning
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learning
opportunities provided by
museums
.
Such
population
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often
urge
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to get free entrance
in
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museums
. But
this
is
also
not
relevent
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relevant
all the
times
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, as
art
galleries can provide
discount
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to
students
who are financially weak.
Secondly
, on some specific days, there should be
minimum
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charge for admission. So that those
cannot
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who cannot
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pay for
tickets
can
also
enjoy equal benefits.
To conclude
, I fervently believe that
advantages
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the advantages
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of charged
tickets
in
museums
hold value
,
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if the
money
is
further
used for
welfare
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the welfare
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of
public
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the public
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and
upgarding
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upgrading
regarding
number
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the number
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of pieces of
art
.
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