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Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep? 1)Tiredness 2)Dark circles

#people #difficulties #lack #tiredness #circles
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 true so many people are suffering from lack of sleep and I was one of them
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I have suffered from insomnia for a long time I think it
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 worst thing a person can face because it has very bad and dangerous side effects and Complications like the person
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focus
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, forgetting, hallucinations and depression .
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 has so bad complications that Guinness
world records
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 collection
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this
 kind of challenge related to sleep. What can we do about
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 consult a specialist to help you to get rid of insomnia, or you can use some drugs to increase your sleep quality
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one thing I would like to point out it, never go to sleep if you don’t feel drowsiness. Avoid contemplating before sleeping try to clear your mind
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