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THE MAPS SHOW THE CHANGES OF A PARTICULAR NATIONAL LIBRARY FROM 2000 UNTIL NOW

THE MAPS SHOW THE CHANGES OF A PARTICULAR NATIONAL LIBRARY FROM 2000 UNTIL NOW
The given maps demonstrate the transformation of a particular national library during a 23-year period starting in 2000. It is clearly seen that the plans show the most noticeable changes in the
fiction
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 in a lot of different areas. Between 2000 and 2023, some places were still in the same place as before. The travel
area
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 is still in the
middle
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 left-hand
corner
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 next to the entrance.
while
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 the New Books
area
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 is
also
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 next to the entrance, but it is located in the bottom right-hand
corner
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. Which is above the service desk, which is
also
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on
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in
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 the bottom left-hand
corner
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. Those are the only areas that have not changed during the 23-year period starting in 2000.
Next,
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we have a non-
fiction
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area
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 that has been by
café
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a café
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 in 2023 with the same size as before, and the café is located in the bottom
middle
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 of the map, far from the entrance. From the sight of the map, up above the café, we will have about 3 tables in the
middle
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 of the plans. That
area
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 has been for
art
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,
hobbies
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, and cooking for the past 23 years. But now that place has been replaced by three tables for students or customers to relax and enjoy coffee.
Furthermore
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, we have two
fiction
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 areas,the first of which took place from the top left right-hand
corner
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 to the top
middle
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. Now it has become smaller to be suitable for the spaces of
art
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,
hobbies
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, and cooking. The
art
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area
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 has now been moved to the top left-hand
corner
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 of the map. Next to the
art
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 is the
hobbies
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area
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, and next to the
hobbies
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 is the cookery
area
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 with the final space for
fiction
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. The second
fiction
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area
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 was on the top left-hand
corner
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;
it’s
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its
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 size is not very long like the first one, but it is kind of big. That
area
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 has now become a non-
fiction
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area
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 and still has the same size as before.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fiction, area, middle, corner, art, hobbies with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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