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Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter explain why you changed jobsdescribe your new jobtell him/her your other news

#friend #jobsdescribe #jobtell #news
Dear Jack, I hope
this
 letter finds you well my dear friend, I'
m
 writing
this
 message to tell you that I left
the
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my
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 job
in
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at
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 ASD corporation and joined a new technological company called IBM,
although
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Although
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 the two companies are in the same field, the challenges in the current firm are significant. I'
m
 gonna tell you more about my position now and what I anticipate to happen
the
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in the
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 next few weeks. Now, I'
m
 the senior accountant of my department,
firstly
, I have to prepare weekly reports about our sales and provide the marketing department
by
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with
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this
 data,
moreover
, I'
m
 responsible for preparing all tax reports
at the end
 of each month,
in addition
, forming some of
potential
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 financial risks that we should avoid is one of my tasks,
finally
, the task of dealing with overdue bills is the hardest part of my job. I'
m
 in
relationship
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a relationship
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 now brother and I'
m
 going to marry soon, my girlfriend is from Jeddah and she is very happy to come and live with me here in my city. When I determine the day of my
weeding
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wedding
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 I will let you
now
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know
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, please try to be here to celebrate with me. Just send me a message brother when you get free. with all love, Adam
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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