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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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The bar chart illustrates
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 expenditure of exports of one country in five different categories in 2015 and 2016, and the table details disparities in percentages of the same categories during the same time period. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent that the majority of
export
earnings
 came from petroleum and engineered goods, with only
small
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 part of
earnings
 accounting for agricultural
products
 and textiles.
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 the value of all categories increased, the expenditure on gems and
jewelery
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jewellery
has
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decreased . Considering petroleum
products
, they have brought the majority of
export
earnings
 of 60
billion
 $ in 2015, and they
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 a slight increase of 3% in 2016 to reach a value of just above 60
billion
 $. In spite of having a sharper of 8.5%, the figure for engineered was slower than for petroleum
products
 at around 60
billion
 $. Gems and jewelry was the only category for
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 a decrease , which was 5.8%, has been recorded, with
value
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 of
export
earnings
 being 41
billion$
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billion
 in 2016. In regards to agricultural
products
, the
export
earnings
 remained almost constant, at approximately 40
billion$
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billion
. Despite having a sharpest increase of 15.24%, the
export
 expenditure for textiles was equal to the
export
earnings
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products
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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