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The supplied map gives data on the developments that were at the seaside resort of Templeton from 1990 to 2005

The supplied map gives data on the developments that were at the seaside resort of Templeton from 1990 to 2005
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The map
show
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shows
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 some changes
about
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in
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the strucutre
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strucutre
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structure
Templeton
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of Templeton
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 which
were
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was
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 at the seaside between 1990 and 2005.
overall
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Overall
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, the seaside had massive change
during
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over
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 15 years,
however
 it has been converted from
rural
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a rural
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 area to
residential
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a residential
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 region. The seaside Templeton by
river
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the river
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 on the
center
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centre
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 divided to two
part
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parts
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 of East and West. In 1990, the west part of
area
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the area
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, which was some houses converted to a sophisticated residential and a big supermarket in 2005. In
south-east
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the south-east
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 , a massive part
ot
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of
green
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the green
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 region
replaced
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was replaced
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to
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by
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a factory and ferry in 2005.
While
, school, hospital, parking and railway
satation
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station
remaind
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remained
remind
remain
trough
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through
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years
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the years
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,
but
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apply
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one airport and some residential
apartment
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apartments
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built
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were built
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in
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apply
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north-east of Templeton.
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