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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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When it comes to longer confinement sentences for the mob, there are differing opinions on the matter. It is important to explore
both
 dialogues to gain a comprehensive understanding. In
this
 essay,
both
 communications will be discussed followed by my opinion. Supporters of longer lockup sentences argue that it will keep organized crime away from society.
This
 means, that when syndicates stay in confinement, they do not harm innocent people and keeping them in confinement will help others stay safe and happy.
For instance
, a survey showed that in Delhi putting gangland behind bars is helping to reduce the crime rate.
On the other hand
, opponents of longer
prison
 sentences contend that it will not help to change the criminal mindset.
This
 is because, in ,
prison
 a person interacts and lives with other criminals when two same criminal mindset person will interact, it will not help in reducing the crime rate. To instantiate, it can be seen that in India most criminal groups are built in prisons and these groups are making crimes outside of
prison
. After considering
both
 sides of an argument, I am inclined to support a longer
prison
sentence
. I find the argument in favour of a longer
prison
sentence
 more compelling because punishment should be rigorous for criminals which will deter them from committing crimes. There are valid points made by the opposing side ,
however
Add a comma
,however
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 longer
prison
sentence
 offers more benefits for society. In conclusion,
while
both
 sides have their own points from my perspective, the benefits of a longer
prison
sentence
 for criminals for society will always outweigh its disadvantages.
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