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It is undeniable that nowadays second language is play big role and has become a essential part of education system.

#second #language #role #part #education #system
It is undeniable that nowadays second
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big
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 role and has become
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 essential part of
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 system. Some experts assume that learning of foreign
language
 at primary school is better for children.
However
, there is no absolute agreement as some people find it hard for students. Surely, there are both pros and cons to it but I believe
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outhweight
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outweigh
outweighed
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the disavdantages
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disavdantages
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disadvantages
. Firts and
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foremost
for most
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positives
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 of studying another
language
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developing
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 of
creativness
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creativeness
. From the view of US
scintists
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scientists
 by remembering words in other
languages
 brain will stressed out and train
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 system, with which critical thinking will improve. A good example here is the grand masters of chess, 95
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 of whom completely know two or more
languages
.
Secondly
,it will be easy in the future
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 students, if they
also
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 foreign
language
in
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academic
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an academic
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 level.
For instance
, nowadays all prestige universities around the world demand
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 level of
english
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. For the
graduaters
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graduates
graduate
 who study mostly
native
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the native
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language
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 it is hard to
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for
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 developed universities. Turning to the other side of the argument, early learning of other
languages
 can be the reason
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loosing
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 national traditions, because the
language
 is
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 of the culture. In many countries
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 of foreign
languages
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 the role of
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 in assimilation. African states
such
 as SAR
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 citizens lost
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their
 native culture and speak only in
english
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is
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 one of the best samples of it. Implementation of new always can
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 for
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 system. Having
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 everything mentioned
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, we can
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 to
a
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 conclusion that early learning of
second
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language
have
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 kind of risks, but in modern society for the future of student knowing different
languages
 are beneficial.
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