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Some people think that children should not watch television as it has negative effects while some people believe that they should watch television as it helps them in their future. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people believe that watching TV will have
bad
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impacts
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 on juveniles,
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 others think that it will be useful for their careers. Whilst a discussion of both these views is worthwhile, I am a supporter of the former view. On the one hand, children watching television
programs
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 will affect their
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 to say that they are showing more crime and violent scenes which will encourage them to do the same thing in their real lives.
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, it will make them get addicted to those habits.
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, most of the TV
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 of action movies have violence and revenge for the enemies and when youth watch
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 kinds of scenes they tend to do the same in real life. In my opinion, I believe they should not watch TV as it will be a negative influence for minors to commit crimes.
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, watching television
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 as Animal Planet and NEWS will enhance the knowledge of the offspring.
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, they will get the opportunity to learn and see the animals and their
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, the activities happening in the world by watching the news channels.
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 will help them to develop their passion and proceed with their career.
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, a minor can know about the habits of wild animals and their significant part in biodiversity.
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, I do not support
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 notion, as most of the youngsters are following their parents by seeing unnecessary
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 which will not help them in their future. In conclusion,
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 some people think that children ought to watch television as it helps them to learn new things and implement them in their careers, I reiterate it has more drawbacks which will affect their attitudes by watching irrelevant
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 for their growth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • inappropriate content
  • educational programs
  • cognitive skills
  • social awareness
  • global issues
  • bonding tool
  • critical thinking
  • comprehension
  • knowledge retention
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