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The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Information about the sources of revenue and
expences
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expenses
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 of a US charity in US dollars for one year is presented by two pie charts.
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, the institution spent over fifty-three million and two hundred twenty thousand dollars, which is slightly less
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 a
quater
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quarter
 of
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a milliion
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milliion
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million
millions
 than what they
recieved
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received
. Most
noticable
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noticeable
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 is the fact that close to 96% of the money went to program services. The other two - fundraisings and management, which
togeter
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together
 make slightly more than 5% of the expenditures. Donated food was the biggest
sourse
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source
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 of revenue taking up more than 86% of it. Far more than the following one with around ten per cent - community contributions. Program Revenue contributed to
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with
 2%. The rest of the sources together combine to less than
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one per cent.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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