The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola.

The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola.
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The given chart and the prone graph
as well
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highlight data about selling
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prices for refreshing drunken Coca-Cola.
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, it can be seen that the price of
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cool drink had a fluctuating trend over the period in question
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its popularity among Americans was higher than on other continents. Looking at the details, in 1996 its price commenced at around 40$ and in the following year, it reached under 70$. After decreasing, it hit a peak at roughly 80$ in 1998 and
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, in the following two years; it fluctuated steadily and
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, in 2000 hit a tough with under 50$ and in the second half of
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year stopped at 60$
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. Regarding the pie chart, North America was at the top of the list with 30.4 per cent.
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, it was followed by Latin America with five per cent lower than it. Followingly, Europe was ranked third with one-fifth. Asia had only 16,4 portions.
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, Africa and the Middle East both had only seven per cent which was nowhere near as high as others.
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