The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola.

The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola.
The given chart and the prone graph
as well
Rephrase
apply
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highlight data about selling
along with
prices for refreshing drunken Coca-Cola.
Overall
, it can be seen that the price of
this
cool drink had a fluctuating trend over the period in question
while
its popularity among Americans was higher than on other continents. Looking at the details, in 1996 its price commenced at around 40$ and in the following year, it reached under 70$. After decreasing, it hit a peak at roughly 80$ in 1998 and
then
, in the following two years; it fluctuated steadily and
conversely
, in 2000 hit a tough with under 50$ and in the second half of
this
year stopped at 60$
subsequently
. Regarding the pie chart, North America was at the top of the list with 30.4 per cent.
In addition
, it was followed by Latin America with five per cent lower than it. Followingly, Europe was ranked third with one-fifth. Asia had only 16,4 portions.
Finally
, Africa and the Middle East both had only seven per cent which was nowhere near as high as others.
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