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Band 7.5

You recently went on holiday and your friend lent you a travel guidebook. Write a letter to friend. In your letter: - tell your friend about the holiday - explain how the guidebook was helpful - say when and how you will return the guidebook

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Dear John, I hope
this
 letter finds you in good health. First of all, I would like to express my gratitude and thank you for lending me your travel guidebook. It's well-preserved and has given me great insights into everything and everywhere in the city. I'm elated to say that the holiday was magical and I am eager to embark on
this
 endeavor again in the future. From the moment I landed in the city, the airport landscape caught my eye. It is colourful and full of life, and I'm not talking about nature only, but the entanglement from preserved nature to advanced technology transcended all my highest expectations. Your guidebook was useful from the moment I set foot in the city. It gave me tips on how I should traverse using fast and reliable public transportation. But most importantly, the guide showed me hidden gems when it comes to restaurants. You know I am a foodie and love experiencing new cultures, so you can imagine how delighted I was about that. I arrived back in our home town earlier today and, after I unpacking my bags, I'll get some needed rest. Tomorrow I'll go to your place to hand it back to you,
as well as
 give you some gifts from my trip. See you tomorrow, James.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Try to maintain a clear paragraph structure by focusing each paragraph on a single clear purpose or topic to enhance the coherence of your writing.
Task Achievement
To improve task achievement, consider expanding your discussion on how the guidebook helped you during your holiday with more specific details.
Coherence & Cohesion
The logical structure of the letter can be enhanced by maintaining a clear sequence of ideas and ensuring that each paragraph flows smoothly into the next.
Task Achievement
When providing details about how the guidebook helped, include more varied examples that cover different aspects of your trip, such as sightseeing, cultural experiences, or navigating the area.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gratitude
  • Breathtaking
  • Insights
  • Invaluable
  • Local cuisine
  • Navigating
  • Off-the-beaten-path
  • Anecdotes
  • Well-preserved
  • Reconnect
  • Safeguarded
  • Courier
  • Itinerary
  • Landmarks
  • Cultural gems
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