The diagram shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane
The provided diagram depicts the way in which
sugar
is produced from sugar
cans
.
Overall
, there are 7 stages in the process, beginning with grown sugar
cans
and ending with prepared sugar
which is ready to consume.
The sugar
cans
serve as the raw material in the process. Thus
, these sugar
cans
are cultivated for 12 to 18 months so as to become ready to harvest. After
this
period, these sugar
cans
are harvested by machines and farmers and then
loaded in factories. Next,
the sugar
cans
undergo a crushing process. In this
phase, the sugar
cans
turn to juice
. Afterwards, this
juice
is purified by a limestone filter which results in prepared juice
for the heating section. In the subsequent stage, this
juice
is heated by an evaporator and becomes syrup. Then
, a centrifuge separates sugar
crystals from syrup. Finally
, These sugar
crystals become dry and cold which is the eventual sugar
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