Experts claim that if older people do more exercise they will be healthier and happier. However, many elderly people suffer from a lack of fitness. What are the causes of this and what are some possible solutions?

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of
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elder
people
are not used to
workout
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working
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and
feel
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difficult to move since they
found
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health problems
on
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their
body
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bodies
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. For them, it is hard to find a good
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exercise
in their circumstances which is lack of time because of
a
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distance from office to home. In Korea, some elder
people
still need to work so that they make a living themselves. And some have
phisical
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physical
issues so that they
feel
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find it
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hard to
workout
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work out
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.
Therefore
, to start small
excercise
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exercise
in their situation is better to get used to
workingout
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working out
to
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elder
people
.
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walking
nearby
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near
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their place and stretching at home
is
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are
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one
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some
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of
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good
excercises
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exercises
for the first step. It is easy
to begin
, except
those
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who have
problem
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a problem
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on
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with
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elbow
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the elbow
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or knee.
These working
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out makes
people
sense
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feel
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uncomfortable feeling on the elbow and the knee with heat.
Second,
For those who have pain
on
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in
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elbow
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their elbow
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or knee problem, it is better to
do
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go
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swimming.
Swimming
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pool is
also
used for
rehability
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reachability
reliability
readability
to
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for
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patients who
had
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have
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phisical
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physical
problem
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problems
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. Interestingly, most
of
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people
feel
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find it
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easier to move
thier
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their
body
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bodies
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in water than
moving
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to move
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out of water. In conclusion, It is important that
people
workout
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work out
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for
their
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a
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healthy life even though it is small
exercises
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exercise
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. If they start
workingout
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working out
, they get more and more healthier than before.
Human
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body
is not like
machine
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a machine
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. The more
people
use
thier
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their
body
, the more healthier
people
can be.
when
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one
use
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uses
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muscle
and the
muscle
gets hurt,
muscle
will recover and get bigger than before.
Muscle
gets
people
strength and endurance to make balance in their routine.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Chronic pain
  • Arthritis
  • Mental changes
  • Depression
  • Loneliness
  • Social support
  • Injury prevention
  • Low-impact exercises
  • Tai chi
  • Yoga
  • Health campaigns
  • Senior-friendly
  • Convenience
  • Motivation
  • Community resources
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