In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
One of the most
the
challenging Correct article usage
apply
problem
in our society is the question of who should be responsible Change to a plural noun
problems
about
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for
the
elderly Correct article usage
apply
people
. That problem is not just a financial problem, Use synonyms
also
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it’s
a question of what we want in our society for them.
In the present essay, I would like to talk about two different ways to cope with Use synonyms
the
old Correct article usage
apply
people
’s care but opting more for the government who Use synonyms
it’s
must be responsible for them.
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Firstly
, we have to keep in mind that the majority of the old Linking Words
people
have worked a lot in the past and Use synonyms
due to
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this
fact, the companies which they were working for have to be responsible for their retired employees. Linking Words
For instance
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are contributing
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contribute
the
social security to achieve when they will get the age of retirement, an amount that Correct article usage
apply
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it’s
called Wrong verb form
is
‘pension’
to be able to survive. Correct article usage
a ‘pension’
This
quantity always depends on how many hours have you done at your job and how much of your salary have you contributed to Linking Words
this
public organization.
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On the other hand
, another possibility would be those Linking Words
people
who have never worked in a legal way in their life, or Use synonyms
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otherwise
they didn’t get at least ‘x’ years, to be able to get paid. Add a comma
,otherwise
For example
, Linking Words
it’s
hard to say but, nowadays we can see a lot of Use synonyms
people
in the Use synonyms
word
living like Correct your spelling
world
a
homeless Correct article usage
apply
people
when they get old because they don’t have money Use synonyms
for
afford Change preposition
to
an
accommodation or even though their family doesn’t Correct article usage
apply
want
take care of them, treating them as a burden Add the particle
towant
instead
of as a family.
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To sum up
, to be Linking Words
honest
I must admit that I can’t choose between one of these models because both of them have advantages and drawbacks at the same time. Add a comma
,honest
However
, Linking Words
overall
, if old Linking Words
people
were able to contribute to the economic system, Use synonyms
government
should pay for Add an article
the government
this
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