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Describe a time you used your smartphone to do something important You should say: What happened When it happened How important the smartphone was And explain how you felt about the experience

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The time when I used my
smartphone
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 to do something important that I would like to tell you about is when I was learning
English
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. The reason I was studying
English
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, well, is because previously, I was under a lot of strain at work. I mean I had a lot on my plate. I was feeling stressed out and I started looking for learning a
language
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 to relieve stress. I fell in love with the
English
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language
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 and
then
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, I decided and
then
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, I was going to learn it. It was quite a trendy
language
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 in Vietnam
then
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 because more and more people wanted to speak the lingo.
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, it was not the easiest
language
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 in the world, especially since it was very difficult for me to arrange my schedule to work and
study
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English
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, but I wanted to have a try. So, because I am working in the technology area, the first thing that I thought about is using a
smartphone
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 for
this
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study
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. I downloaded some popular
English
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 studying applications including Elsa, Cambly, and 4Study on my
smartphone
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 and set to it. On top of that, I actually
also
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 signed up for some online classes on the Cambly application. Every day, I would practice lots on the Elsa and
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 read and listen to the 4Study application. After that, I must admit that the
smartphone
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 has brought about enormous advantages to studying
English
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. I can save time on commuting to traditional classes, the cost of learning
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 access a huge academic information. And year, when it comes to how I felt about it, I felt absolutely great because it was really beneficial to me. Learning a
language
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 is challenging, but it will become easier with only a cell phone!
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