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Some people think the Olympic Games is an exciting event which can bring nations together. Other people think Olympic Games is a way for people to waste money that could be used for other events. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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People
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 have differing views with regard to the question of how the
Olympic
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Games
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 impact
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's lives.
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 some argue
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 is just a place for
people
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 to waste
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, I believe the
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Games
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 is an
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 that contributes to diplomatic relations between many countries Admittedly, there is good reason to say
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event
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 is just a method for wealthy
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 to waste
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.
To begin
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 with,
people
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 need to spend a
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 of
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 on tickets.
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 its popularity, it is very hard for fans to have a good place in the stadium.
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, if the seat is too high or too far may leave them unable to see directly.
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, they put more resources into finding good seats.
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, they need to spend
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 on clothes to promote athletes.
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 to clothes, there are many other items that cost them a
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 of
money
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 In spite of the above arguments, I support the view that the
Olympic
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Games
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 is the bridge for cooperation between countries. A
lot
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 of
people
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 from different countries will come to see
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event
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. It will attract an ever-widening circle of
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 who love sports.
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, a
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 of meetings and cooperation will appear through
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event
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. Another reason why
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 can bring nations together is that
people
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 can explore and experience different cultures. A good example is that every time
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Games
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 are held in a different country.
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,
people
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 who come to see
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event
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 can find out new culture that they have never seen before In conclusion,
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 I consider the possible disadvantages of
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event
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 including waste of
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, I consider it to be a good place for
people
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 to make new friends and cooperate
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  • Nationalism
  • Sportsmanship
  • Economic benefits
  • Tourism
  • Infrastructure
  • Investments
  • Opportunity cost
  • Public services
  • Environmental impact
  • Sustainability
  • Cultural festivals
  • Global forums
  • Financial planning
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