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International travel has many advantages to both travellers and the country that they visited. Do advantages outhweigh the disadvantages?

#travel #travellers #country #outhweigh
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The
economy
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 of a
country
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 is associated with different industries and fields. There are different types of industries
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 as automotive, science, engineering, and
last
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, but not least, tourism. We can traduce tourism as international travel which has two perceptions, either negative aspects; like
advantages
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 or negative aspects; like
disadvantages
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. We have to bear in mind that the previously mentioned, will impact directly proportional to the
country
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 and travellers. On the one hand. There are
people
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 who think that international travel has many
advantages
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.
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 the
Economy
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 magazine, the major flow of the
economy
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 of a
country
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 is
due to
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 the flow of travellers.
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, in terms of benefits, the countries receive more visitors which results in more sales, and more foreign investment. Travellers will have benefits and positive
impacts
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 on their lives. Travelling is a treasure for the soul,
people
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 will meet different places, learn different idioms, and interact with a new culture. On top of that. When
people
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 are travelling across the world, they are gaining experiences and memories for their whole life.
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, there are certain
people
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 who believe that international travel carries native
impacts
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. The
disadvantages
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 that could impact strongly on a nation are the kind of
people
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 that are entering the
country
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.
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, the quality and professional background of
people
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 really matters, because, if the visitors do not have a degree or master's of science, those will generate negative
impacts
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 on the culture of the
country
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.
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, keeping the rules and the culture will be really difficult. In conclusion, there are more
advantages
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 than
disadvantages
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. One of the most important positive
impacts
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 is the increase in sales that a
country
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 could have
due to
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 the number of visitors. As we know, there are several benefits for a
country
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, and the
country
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 must keep the
economy
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 level up,
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, the
advantages
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 outweigh the
disadvantages
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global harmony
  • Hospitality sector
  • Diplomacy
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic benefits
  • Personal growth
  • Environmental degradation
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Economic dependence
  • Sustainable tourism
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