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it is better for students to study at home rather than go to school. Do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

#students #study #home #school
Nowadays, technology is improved and updated, so
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 learning online without
school
 is more popular and become favoured by many
students
, especially after COVID-19. In my opinion, I suppose that learning at
home
 is not a good option for
students
 or those who want to learn more.
This
 essay will talk about
this
 statement with disagreeing opinions. On the one hand, studying gets a lot of attention and it is the main issue in improving knowledge or higher education. If you
study
 at
school
, you can understand more easily because learning online or studying yourself at
home
 is so rigid and it is hard to find the iìnormation or detailed documents to
study
. The teacher or professors have identification about the subjects and specialized.
For example
, you can quickly get an answer about your problems in class from the teacher immediately
instead
 of finding it difficult at
home
 on the internet or in documentaries.
Moreover
, studying at
school
 can make a lot of friends and easy to enjoy many outside activities and improve social skills in place of studying at
home
 by yourself.
On the other hand
, studying at
home
 is more comfortable than at
school
 because you can control your table time and be flexible in time of learning. Nobody wants to wake up early or be annoyed by the alarm, so learning online can get the student out of running with time every morning.
Secondly
, competition is not a problem, many
students
study
 with just one reason is their score. The pressure on scores at
school
 but it makes disadvantages effect on
students
, sometimes their forget the aim of learning is to get more knowledge rather than the scores.
In addition
,
study
 is the most important but studying with comfort and focus can
this
 work effective. Learning offline is the best way to easily understand knowledge and improve social skills.
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