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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Music
 is one of the seven arts which is well-known among all nations and different countries house different kinds of
music
. To some extent, it seems that
music
 can attract
people
 of different
cultures
 and ages and join them together. I think that
people
 all around the world and even from different generations can communicate with each other through
music
 better. In my view, as
music
 involves words from a specific language, it can be a good
way
 to communicate with
people
 from other
cultures
.
People
 usually are interested in knowing about different
cultures
 and they find it interesting to Listen to
music
 which is related to a culture
such
 as local
music
. In
this
way
, they can be even more friendly with each other. Another reason that I agree with the magic of
music
 for bringing
people
 of different ages together is that as some
music
 describes the events that have taken place in a specific time,
people
 from different generations can be familiar with these events. Nowadays we may even see that many adults who are really interested in ancient and old
music
 as their elderly are. In
this
way
, I think they can understand their parents or other old
people
's thoughts and feelings better. The
last
 reason that I believe in the power of
music
 is that, sometimes the lyric of
music
 is based on what is happening in a society and it
also
 describes many problems related to a country. So in
this
way
,
people
 can share more sympathy and are able to understand each other better.
Finally
, I believe in the magic and power of
music
 for making
people
 from different
cultures
 and ages closer as it can form and show our thoughts and feelings better.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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