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Some people hold the view that a good teacher is more important for education success while others think the student’s attitude is more important to succeed in education. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, Interest in Children's Quality education has increased. Many believe that the teacher holds a powerful role in a kid's success;
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, others believe that the attitude of the
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 plays an important role in getting a good education. I believe both are equally important. On the one hand, teachers are someone who has to pass information to children. If the teacher has no knowledge of that topic,
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students
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 will never be able to learn that topic.
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, Competent teachers can make
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 interested in that specific topic. To give an example, growing up, I was not keen on Maths, but a teacher inspired me to work on Maths and now maths is one of my favourite subjects.
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, it's the duty of teachers to make
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study
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. On the other side, it's in the hands of
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. We can make a person feed but it's in his hands to gulp it or throw it. We can provide a
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 with the best facility but in the end, it's
students
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 who are studying. he has to motivate himself to
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.
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, if we send a child to the best college which has the best faculty. but if
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 bunk all classes or never pay attention to the class
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 it's of no use. We should consider that greater power is in the
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's hands because without even having a good facility, if a
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 wants to
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then
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 he can
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 himself and get a good result.
To conclude
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, as I mentioned above, good faculty and
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 attitudes all together make the best recipe for success. Without either of them doesn't give the desired result.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inspire
  • motivate
  • engaged
  • persist
  • responsibility
  • resources
  • collaborative efforts
  • educational outcomes
  • discipline
  • study habits
  • interdependent
  • individualized support
  • complex concepts
  • overcome challenges
  • receptive student
  • external factors
  • family support
  • peer influence
  • socio-economic status
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