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MANY PEOPLE FIND IT DIFFICULT TO LIVE A HEALTHY LIFE. WHAT ARE THE DIFFICULTIES THEY FACE? WHAT CAN THESE PEOPLE DO TO BECOME HEALTHIER?

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In recent years, more
people
 have difficulties
to be
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 healthier in the cutting-edge.
This
 essay will discuss
about
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the obstacles
people
 face and recommend some solutions in order to live a healthy life. The two main problems of
struggle
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the struggle
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 to stay healthy are
busy
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a busy
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 lifestyle and
environment
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environmental
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pollution
. Nowadays, a fast-paced lifestyle
make
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people
 tend to eat fast food which contains high fat, sugar and low nutrition leading
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the
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 increase
of
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obesity and heart diseases in society. These are
also
 caused by the
limit
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 time to do exercise for a hustle day. A
further
 issue is
that
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the
environment
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environmental
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pollution
 caused by
fast
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the fast
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 development of
industry
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the industry
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. The waste and the gas from vehicles
as well as
 the firm lead to
the
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air
pollution
, which
cause
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 lung disease and cancer.
Thus
, to be faced with these challenges, the population can begin
at
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adopting better time management
skill
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 and government
protect
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environment
 projects. Individuals may prepare
meal
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meals
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 at home and get up early to
do
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exercise before going to work or school. There are many groups to
helps
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people
more
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motivation
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in getting
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 a healthy lifestyle. An
addition
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 solution is that the government should organize projects which protect the
environment
. By reducing the price of public transportation
such
 as
bus
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buses
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 or
train
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trains
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 in local
area
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areas
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 in order to increase
a
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 number of passengers
in stead
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instead
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 of using individual mean.
And the
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 law aims to punish companies
which their
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 waste is expelled into the
environment
 for citizens in order not to live in a fresh air life. In conclusion, busyness and
pollution
 are significant issues that prevent
people
form
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from
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 staying
heathy
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healthy
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.
However
,
people
 can practice
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to manage
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 their time to take part in government environmental projects to protect their health.
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