Some People claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

in
Capitalize word
In
show examples
this
globalization,
people
do more things,
eat
Correct word choice
and eat
show examples
more things, so there are many
waste
Change preposition
of waste
show examples
from their daily activities.
According to
this
problem, some individuals say that
many
Correct quantifier usage
much
show examples
waste
from homes is not already recycled, they say that the only method to increase recycling is for governments to make it a
law
, a
rule
, a legal
requirement
. So
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
my view,
this
suggestion
not
Add a missing verb
is not
show examples
already needed and there are some reasons why I don’t agree. As you know, a
law
that
make
Change the verb form
makes
show examples
us have to do something, a
law
,
rule
Correct article usage
a rule
show examples
od very strong and serious, so if the
government
make it a
rule
,
people
will become uncomfortable, angry and day by day all of them will not obey to the
rule
. So I think that
government
not
Change the verb form
does not
did not
show examples
need to make a legal
requirement
they only need to usually encourage,
help
Correct word choice
and help
show examples
everybody to become comfortable and happy to recycle their
waste
because there are many factors
make
Correct pronoun usage
that make
show examples
the
waste
from home become higher so
government
Add an article
the government
show examples
can manage all of them, only every
individuals
Change to a singular noun
individual
show examples
recycle so
government
cant
Correct your spelling
can't
show examples
make a
law
to make them have to recycle their
waste
.
For instance
, when a person
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
waste
. If they think to the
government
and the
encourage
Replace the word
encouragement
show examples
of the
government
, they will become more happy to recycle to protect habitat for everyone but if
this
is a
law
, a legal
requirement
they will feel uncomfortable and have some negative activities.
This
is very terrible
at
Change preposition
apply
show examples
all
Correct determiner usage
apply
show examples
, I think,
people
don’t need a
law
or a legal
requirement
, they only need an encourage everybody,
government
Correct article usage
the government
show examples
to recycle their
waste
in order to protect
environment
Add an article
the environment
show examples
. But if some
people
still
waste
, of
course
Add the comma(s)
,course
show examples
they must had some negative activities from
government
Correct article usage
the government
show examples
. In conclusion, not easy to
offer
Verb problem
encourage
show examples
all
people
to recycle their
waste
but not already need a
rule
, a
law
to make
people
to
Change the verb form
apply
show examples
obey to recycle,
the
Capitalize word
The
show examples
government
only need some
encourage
Replace the word
encouragement
show examples
for everyone,
recycle
Fix the infinitive
to recycle
show examples
waste
,
protect
Correct word choice
and protect
show examples
environment
Add an article
the environment
show examples
together.
Submitted by aesacademyforenglishstudy on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: