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It is better for children if the whole family including aunts, uncles and so on are involved in a child’s upbringing, rather than just their parents.

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Many today feel
that is
 important for the entire extended family to play a role in child-rearing,
while
 others feel that
parents
 are sufficient. In my opinion, the whole family should be part of the process. Those who doubt the value of the whole family in raising
children
 often point out the potentially negative influence of particular
relatives
. In an ideal world, each family member would impart their own unique, mature perspectives in the interests of raising a well-rounded child. In practice, many
relatives
 are more likely to serve as bad examples or contradict the efforts of the
parents
. The
best case
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 scenario with
such
 individuals is confusion and in more extreme cases it could lead to developmental problems. There is even the possibility that a close relative is engaging in physical or mental abuse of a child without the parent’s awareness.
Nonetheless
, the instances above are exceptions that can be dealt with on a case-by-case basis; in most
families
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 extra help lessens the burden on
parents
. A good example of
this
 would be in countries with very tight-knit families
such
 as in Asia and South America. There it is very common for aunts, uncles and the extended family to lend a hand
with
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 raising
children
. The main benefits of
this
 are for
parents
 and
children
.
Parents
 get a
much needed
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 break from looking after their kids.
Children
 benefit from the undivided attention of their
relatives
. When they come back home, their mother and father are
also
 more likely to feel recharged and fully engaged in parenting duties having had some time to themselves. In conclusion, though there are rare situations where the whole family raising a child can be
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negative, it is important for
parents
 to receive support from
relatives
.
Parents
 should strive to have
this
 familial environment in order to raise well-adjusted adults.
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