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It is often said “when in Rome, do as the Romans do. ” Do you think people should adapt and accept the culture of the country they visit?Do you think it is possible to learn a culture without learning the language

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In these modern days, people can easily travel anywhere in the world, thanks to the advanced technology in transportation. Indeed, tourism has been becoming popular in many parts of the earth. Some people believe that we have to
respect
 and learn the local
culture
 of places that visited. I firmly agree with the statement, and I believe that we will still be able to adapt or understand local
culture
, even though we know nothing about their
language
.
To begin
 with, there is a saying "When in Rome, do as the Romans do" which means that we should always try to adapt and
respect
 the
culture
 and customs of the country that we visit. There are a few different reasons why I agree with the aforementioned statement.
Firstly
, one of the main reasons for travelling to other countries is to learn about new
culture
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 and traditions that are distinctive from ours.
This
 way, we will have a different perspective and broaden
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our mind
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mind
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minds
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.
Secondly
, as a guest in a new place, it is paramount that we
respect
 the local
custom
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customs
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 and
belief
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beliefs
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.
Therefore
, we might have a safe and enjoyable
staying
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. A few weeks ago, two foreign tourists in Bali got arrested and deported to their country because they walked around in the village despite knowing it was forbidden
due to
Nyepi
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 Festival. Nyepi is a religious festival for Balinese, where every person in Bali should stay at home. In terms of whether it is possible to learn a
culture
 without spending time
to learn
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 the
language
, I believe that the answer is yes it
quite
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 possible to understand and adapt a
culture
 without learning the related
language
. In my opinion,
culture
 is a huge aspect of
people
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people's
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 lives, and
language
just
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 a little part of a
culture
.
For example
, a myriad of foreigners in Bandung learn and practice Sundanese dance, and despite not knowing Sundanese or Indonesian
language
 they became very good at it. In conclusion, we indeed have to
respect
 the local
culture
 of the place we visit so that we might have a better life experience.
Also
, it is quite possible to learn other aspects of a
culture
 but the
language
.
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