The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
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The bar chart provides some changes in the proportion of people who were born in
Australia
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and who were born outside
Australia
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, who lived in cities, rural areas and towns from 1995 to 2010. It can be seen that citizens born in
Australia
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was the highest proportion both in 1995 and in 2010, which increased from nearly 50% to about 65%.
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, rural inhabitants dropped significantly, with a reduction of about two-thirds of that in 1995 (30%). At the same time, the town's birth rate declined, from 20% in 1995 to roughly 16%。 In terms of the percentage of people born outside
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, urban people kept an upward trend, with 60 per cent from 1995 to 80 per cent, being the biggest rate among the three areas. The second birth rate outside
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was rural populations (40%) in 1995, which fell into the
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at the end
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. Meanwhile, towns' infants overseas had a slight decrease at just the percentage of five. In summary, the birth rates of citizens whether in
Australia
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or outside were the highest proportion in the given periods, and it kept soaring in both parts of both years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • urbanization
  • migration patterns
  • population distribution
  • percentage points
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend analysis
  • socioeconomic factors
  • infrastructure development
  • rural exodus
  • census data
  • lifestyle changes
  • residential patterns
  • immigration policies
  • emigration
  • natural increase
  • birth rate
  • settlement patterns
  • push and pull factors
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