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In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
 era, many young
people
 are lazy and fewer young
people
 want to do
sports
activities
. A lot of young
people
 are less interested in
sports
activities
. They prefer to do any other
activities
 except
sports
. In
this
 essay, I will give some solutions to solve
this
 case and give the reason why young
people
 are less interested in
sports
. These days, many young
people
 are addicted to their
gadgets
. Most of
teenegers
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teenagers
 give their attention to mobile
games
. They can spend their whole day playing their mobile
games
 because they just want to sit and play the
games
. They should not spend their energy doing
sports
activities
.
For example
, young
people
 can spend their time just
laying
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lying
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 on their bed and playing
some
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mobile
games
 so they will not do any other
activities
 except
sports
. In these
cases
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parents
 have to give their attention to their
children
. The
parents
 have to talk to their
children
 and give some advice to reduce their interactions with their
gadgets
. The
parents
also
 have to give some motivation to their
children
 to do other
activities
.
For example
,
the
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parents
 give their
children
time
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a time
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 limit
of playing
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to play
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 with their own
gadgets
 and give some knowledge about
benefits
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the benefits
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 of playing
sports
 to encourage their
children
 to do
sports
activities
. All in all, many young
people
 are lazy and prefer to spend their time with their
gadgets
. But these things can be solved by their
parents
’ guidance.
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