Governments spend millions of dollars each year on their space programmes. Most recently, Mars is the focus of scientists attention. Some people think this money would be better spent on dealing with problems closer to home. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own Knowledge or experience.

#governments #millions #dollars #year #space #programmes #focus #scientists #attention #people #money #home

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Nowadays, space research is very viral and lots of countries even the poor ones intend to spend a large amount of money on their programme related to

this

field. Actually, I am not a big fan of

this

process and blame it , especially for those governments who have enormous vital problems in their area of control. Frankly, I am very curious about what else exists in the universe and what is going on outside the Earth ,

Also

I think we should be aware of anything new in the world. So emiting space craft and observing new lands could be crucial.

On the other hand

, The earth does not have the potential to support humankind forever and its supplies will end one day.

Thus

The men have to discover another suitable spot to live.

In addition

, March recently seems desperately the only option that has been searching till now. and draws a lot of attention to itself with satisfying criteria. Despite all the reasons mentioned, non-progressed and poor countries must have focused on other troubles

such

as poverty, malnourished

people

, dreadful economies etc. Because, In my side of view, human life is a substantial issue that each government have to put its effort into . So it is reasonable whether your

people

have an adequate situation to exist,

then

concentrate on

further

improvement. In the 21st century, we are witnessing an intensifying number of dead children who are deceased as they cannot derive proper nutrition.

However

, a non-affluence economy not only influences low-proportion

people

in society but

also

has a great impact on those

people

who are considered moderate. In a way of conclusion, conquering and grasping space does not assume unnecessary,

although

there are still subjects that matter more.

Therefore

, in my ,opinion the government should set some priorities when they are authorizing.

Submitted by reihanetorfe on Mon Aug 28 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Coherence and Cohesion

Develop your introduction and conclusion more fully to provide a clear framework for the essay.

Task Achievement

Consider addressing the task prompt more directly by providing a balanced discussion of both space programs and domestic problems.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

11
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

304 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

7
band
Some cities have vehicle-free days when private cars, trucks, and motorcycles are banned from the city center. Public transportation like buses, taxis, and metros are advised. To what extent do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?
Urban areas are very congested these days therefore, there are special occasions in which big lorries, personal cars and motorcycles are prohibited in the central sections of the city. In addition, using public services is recommended on such occasions. There are some drawbacks related to it and some benefits which are more invaluable than those of problems.
5
band
Some educational systems make students study specialised subjects while others require students to study a wide range. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
In this day and age, many people still debated about whether the children should neither learn the overall courses or the specific field at school. Despite this topic still being a public controversy, this essay will explain both of these views, and I believe that the pupils who learning a wide range of studies will get more benefits than the students that only focus on certain field of studies.
4.5
band
In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?
In today's digital age, there is a rise in customer who are curious, which lead to spend money on imported food more than local food. However, this can be tackled by increasing tax on imported food, including focuses of traditional food.
4.5
band
Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Write 250 words.)
Many think that the larger the companies are, the higher wages they have to pay for their COEs and executives. This is because of that, the higher positions are the one who control and order the command to others. Therefore, some of the people believe that the more their paid to the Mannger, the better results they wil get. This essay argues to the statement that the big companies should pay greater earns to the CEOs and other managers compared to the lower level of workers.
6
band
Do advantages of the Internet outweigh its disadvantages ?[423]
Information technology has fantastically come over as a breath of fresh air in people’s lives. It cannot be denied that the benefits IT brings about are so wondrous. Yet I still firmly believe that the drawbacks of technology outweigh the positives of it. I will provide relevant reasoning and evidence to support my stance.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some cities have vehicle-free days when private cars, trucks, and motorcycles are banned from the city center. Public transportation like buses, taxis, and metros are advised. To what extent do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

Some educational systems make students study specialised subjects while others require students to study a wide range. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Write 250 words.)

Do advantages of the Internet outweigh its disadvantages ?[423]