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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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It is argued by some
people
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 reducing the population on the outskirts has affirmative impacts,
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 others have opposing ideas. In my opinion,
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 is an unfavourable and detrimental influence on
cities
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. I will clarify a variety of reasons with tangible examples. The first and foremost reason has to do with job opportunities.
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, those who move to
cities
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 from suburbs, are very likely to lead to lack positions and job vacancies, especially for students after their graduation. Another significant reason is that the growing population in
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 brings about more crimes, including mugging, pickpocketing, robbery, and
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, among others. Just as important, the accumulation of
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 in
cities
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 results in some challenges. To put it simply, crowded
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 have more traffic congestion and sometimes it is really nerve-wracking for
people
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 to get stuck in traffic and lose their precious time in traffic.
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, air pollution is one of the most crucial problems in large
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, in which elderly
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 are more in danger of harmful
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 diseases as, asthma, cancer, stroke, arrest, and the like.
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 but not least, living in big
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 is expensive in that rents are high, and food costs a lot. Many
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 have to work two or do overtime to afford living expenses. Indeed, living expenditures surging markedly.
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,
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 the increasing crowd in large
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 rather than in the suburbs has to a certain extent benefits, it gives rise to fundamental, and profound issues for both
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 and the environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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