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It is better for students to study from home rather than go to school. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#students #study #home #school
There is an argument that studying at
home
 is better than
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 to
school
. I absolutely disagree with
this
 statement and
this
 essay will explain things. First of all,
the
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education nowadays is more developing in ages.
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Studying
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 online or offline is up to you.
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Studying
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 at
home
 can be very convenient because you can join the class all the time without
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being affraid
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affraid
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afraid
 of
lating
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waiting
 or
out
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being out
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 of time.
Moreover
, we can find
the
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documents, homework and
instruction
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instructions
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 on the Internet. Learning it by yourself. Getting more ideas or inspiration
by
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the
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AI technology or
others
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 educational programs.
However
, studying at
school
 is better than at
home
. It can give us
the
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communication with the teacher who can be
a
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 adviser for
you
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us
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 if
you
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we
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have
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 any
mistake
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.
For instance
, if we have confusion during the lesson, we can ask and learn it in more detail and understand it easier. Unlike the AI, we can not
interract
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interact
 with it as the teacher.
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In conclusion
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, education at
school
 is good for us than at
home
. The
interraction
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interaction
 and practicing are important in learning all aspects.
There
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,
study
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studying
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 at
school
 should be more priority.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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