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Is it better for student to study from home rather than go to school. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In modern life, it is known that study become more important in their lives. Have the argument about their way of learning that students should choose accommodation for studying
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 of going to the academy. For my side, I disagree with
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 idea. When we learn at
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,
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 optimistic is the comfortable environment
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 our
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, but that leads to the pessimistic that the relaxation will turn to a lazy feeling. On the
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 ,hand we have many entertainment systems and it is hard to control ourselves, people always prefer playing to working and if we apply it to
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 case, it is still true,
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 research told us that students cannot keep all their concentrations more than forty-five minutes and after that , children’s mind
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 think to games, sport or anything else which is attended to by them.
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, learning at
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 has the same meaning with no
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 controlling their action.
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 parents may maybe good, they do not have enough time for their brood. If the child has a weak mentality or bad habits, they will become a crime or gangster in the future
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 the freedom at
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.
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, with going to faculty to exercise, the most merit is children will have more friends, somebody said that the relations at the seminary are like a small society, many personal characteristics the child will contact and they must co-op with their friends, it helps the student to provide themselves and
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 certain factor it would be more fun at playing with a friend than stay at
home
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 day by day .
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, studies at the hall show that children are managed by their teacher, who has experience with how to make a person become better, and they can have students do hard exercises rather than find them on the internet.
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, studying at the academy is better than that at the house.
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 reality thing that if you choose your
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 to study in, you must prepare plenty of plans and rules and it is a complex way for children.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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