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«Technology is becoming progressively universal. In the fullness of time, classroom teachers will be totally substituted for technology. Do you agree or disagree?»

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Technology
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 has shown tremendous growth in the
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 few years.
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 many people believe that there will be a day when schools and universities will shut down and people will rely completely on
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 to become fully qualified in their fields, I believe there are certain practices in teaching that
technology
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 can not conduct. In the given essay, I will argue why
technology
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 will never be able to replace traditional classrooms and
teachers
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. On the one hand,
technology
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 definitely assists
teachers
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 in making their teaching process convenient.
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 is because many
teachers
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, these days, use modern equipment
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 as projectors, the internet and educational platforms
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 as Coursera and Udemy to teach
students
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.
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, these facilities are used in combination with
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teacher's
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 knowledge to impart
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high quality
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education to pupils.
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, if
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 are simply given a video lecture to follow through, most of the
students
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 would not see it with utmost attention, rather most of them would be unattentive because of the absence of the
teacher
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. So the presence of
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 in classrooms creates a brings a sense of responsibility among
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,
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 which they try to grasp the topics taught with complete attention. The presence of
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 develops a sense of accountability among
students
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. The reason for
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 they know that
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 of the
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day
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 is going to ask whether they have completed their academic work or not. For the reasons I have outlined above, I believe
technology
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 will never be able to replace
teachers
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.
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,
technology
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 can not provide mental support and motivation to children like
teachers
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 can.
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 is because even the most advanced
technology
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 like Artificial intelligence has not developed enough to completely imitate humans.
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, if a
student
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 is taking a class for spoken English and if he feels really inferior about his English,
teachers
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 can conduct several
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 to make him feel comfortable in the classroom environment. These
activities
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 may include ice-breaking
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, introducing a
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 to other peers, and role-playing
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 where a
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 can play various real-life scenarios
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 as ordering food online or asking for directions.
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 would help him to be good at practical applications of English.
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 can even provide personal feedback to each
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 by identifying their strengths and weaknesses.
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, the way
teachers
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 can provide emotional strength to
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 that
technology
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 can't. In conclusion,
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technology
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 can assist
students
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 in becoming better at their field of study, it will never take the
teacher
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's place.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal
  • substitution
  • empathy
  • motivation
  • discipline
  • accessible
  • self-paced
  • personalized learning
  • adaptive learning systems
  • analytics
  • human element
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • digital divide
  • privacy concerns
  • future developments
  • ethical considerations
  • complement
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