Some people believe that the government should financially support retired people. Others think they should care for themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In
present
day, there are high level of unemployment among Add an article
the present
young
generation. The main problem that can be caused is economic issues Add an article
the young
to
the country and a viable solution is Change preposition
for
support
young Fix the infinitive
to support
people
in all kinds of help
The major problem is that young people
can leads
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lead
to
Change preposition
apply
the
economic Correct article usage
apply
problems
, because of their life-style
. Some young Correct your spelling
lifestyle
people
do not have a work
, because they do not have motivation
to achieve their goals, but Change the article
the motivation
existing
Verb problem
apply
other type
of Change the wording
another type
other types
people
who just do not have a work
, because they have a wish and they want to continue their career by
Change preposition
in
bad
way , Correct article usage
a bad
such
as,
criminal Correct your spelling
lifestyle
life-style
, Correct your spelling
lifestyle
therefore
, they might be robbery shops or perform illegal things, because they have a lot of problems
in their life , such
as,
lack of money,opportunity
or they have some Correct word choice
or opportunity
problems
with their mental health.
The most practical solution to this
is that government
should give all Correct article usage
the government
possibility
for young Fix the agreement mistake
possibilities
people
, such
as,
accessible Remove the comma
apply
works
with Fix the agreement mistake
work
high
salary ,Correct article usage
a high
moreover
, parents
should see their childrens
under supervision to Correct your spelling
children
children's
prevents
economic Wrong verb form
prevent
problems
. Furthermore
, young people
should be motivated and have a target to reach. However
, young people
should have tight-knit relationships with their parents
or family, because have
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having
a
bad relations with Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
parents
can affected
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affect
to
their behaviours or job progression.
Change preposition
apply
Parents
playing
a vital role in Wrong verb form
play
Correct article usage
the lifes
lifes
of young Correct your spelling
lives
people
, therefore
, family
support Correct article usage
the family
their
and Correct pronoun usage
them
give
Correct subject-verb agreement
gives
incitiatives
to Correct your spelling
initiatives
initiative
enroll
in Change the spelling
enrol
work
and being
satisfied.
In conclusion, Wrong verb form
be
government
should give very good conditions for young Add an article
the government
people
to outperform their work
because young
generation Correct article usage
the young
it
is Correct pronoun usage
apply
future
of Correct article usage
the future
country
which might Add an article
the country
a country
be show
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show
a
good results in their Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
works
. Fix the agreement mistake
work
Moreover
,
to
prevent issues Capitalize word
To
authority
should make Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
a
strict rules for all Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
people
and being
more responsible for Change the verb form
be
future
of young Correct article usage
the future
people
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