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the graph below gives information about the percentage of the population of four asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040

the graph below gives information about the percentage of the population of four asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of urban residents in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
, Thailand and
Indonesia
 between 1970 and 2020,with the expectations from 2030 to 2040.
Overall
, it is clearly shown on the chart that the percentage of population in all four countries is increasing and
Malaysia
 has the highest
percent
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percentage
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 almost all the time.
Malaysia
 and
Indonesia
 all have a significant
rise
 in their proportion of population, respectively from 30 to 85 for
Malaysia
 and 13 to 63 for
Indonesia
.
Malaysia
 has always been
the
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at the
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 top except
1970
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in 1970
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 and 1990 with a little gap
form
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from
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 the first.
Indonesia
 was the
last
 in 1970. But its rate grew quickly and
exceed
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exceeded
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other
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the other
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 two countries in 2000 and 2010.
Philippines
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The Philippines
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 was
the
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at the
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 top at
first,
with
a
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an
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 obvious increase from 31 to 50 in 1990 but
then
 dropped to 45
at
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in
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 2010.
Finally
, it is expected to
rise
 to 55 which is lower than
Indonesia
.Thailand have a slow
rise
 from 18 to 30 at first and
then
have
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has
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 almost no
changeable
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change
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 until it is predicted to
rise
 again by 2020 and the rate still is the
last
 one in the end.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, indonesia, rise with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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