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Some people think that the provision of healthcare is the responsibility of the state, while others believe the individual to be responsible for the costs of their own healthcare. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these perspectives?

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Nowadays, in both developed and developing countries, many
people
 are discussing the topic of the
cost
 of
healthcare
.
While
 some
people
 think there are
advantages
 to the state should pay for
healthcare
, other
people
 think there are
advantages
 for individuals who might pay for the
cost
 of their own
healthcare
. In my opinion, both of these perspectives make sense and will be discussed below. On the one hand, as far as the
cost
 of
healthcare
 paid by the state is concerned,
firstly
, to a large extent, no matter the world you live in, everyone can have access to care
due to
 the fact that free for individual person, resulting in having access for the poorest.
In addition
, and most importantly to me,
people
 might be equal
of
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 care, no matter their income or where
you
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they
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 are from leading to having access to any kind of surgery
for example
.
On the other hand
, at least to some degree, there are
advantages
 of individuals might pay for the amount of their own
healthcare
. First and foremost, by and large, you can choose your own treatment, on account of the fact you have some preferences.
For example
, you prefer to use an alternative medicine
such
 as homoeopathy.
Secondly
, in general, when the government don't pay for
healthcare
, there are more subsidies to develop infrastructure
such
 as school or public transport. In conclusion,
while
 many
people
 think the
cost
 of
healthcare
 should be paid by the government has many
advantages
,
other
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others
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 say that the
cost
 should be paid by
individual
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individuals
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 are better.
However
, from my point of view, both perspectives have value for the reasons discussed below.
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