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Some people think that the provision of healthcare is the responsibility of the state, while others believe the individual to be responsible for the costs of their own healthcare. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these perspectives?

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Nowadays, in both developed and developing countries, many
people
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 are discussing the topic of the
cost
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 of
healthcare
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.
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 some
people
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 think there are
advantages
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 to the state should pay for
healthcare
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, other
people
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 think there are
advantages
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 for individuals who might pay for the
cost
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 of their own
healthcare
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. In my opinion, both of these perspectives make sense and will be discussed below. On the one hand, as far as the
cost
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 of
healthcare
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 paid by the state is concerned,
firstly
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, to a large extent, no matter the world you live in, everyone can have access to care
due to
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 the fact that free for individual person, resulting in having access for the poorest.
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, and most importantly to me,
people
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 might be equal
of
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in
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 care, no matter their income or where
you
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they
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 are from leading to having access to any kind of surgery
for example
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.
On the other hand
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, at least to some degree, there are
advantages
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 of individuals might pay for the amount of their own
healthcare
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. First and foremost, by and large, you can choose your own treatment, on account of the fact you have some preferences.
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, you prefer to use an alternative medicine
such
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 as homoeopathy.
Secondly
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, in general, when the government don't pay for
healthcare
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, there are more subsidies to develop infrastructure
such
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 as school or public transport. In conclusion,
while
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 many
people
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 think the
cost
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 of
healthcare
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 should be paid by the government has many
advantages
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,
other
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others
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 say that the
cost
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 should be paid by
individual
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individuals
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 are better.
However
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, from my point of view, both perspectives have value for the reasons discussed below.

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