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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about history of the house or building they live in.

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In
this
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 era, most
people
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 prefer to gain background about
houses
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 to live there in some countries. There are several causes behind
this
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 notion, and
this
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 essay explores the primary reasons behind
this
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 belief
such
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 as old
houses
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 having
lots
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 of drawbacks, and
government
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 and
health
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issues
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. First of all,
house
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 history is important because it gives information about various
issues
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such
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 as future drawbacks and some
government
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issues
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. Everything
that is
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 used for building is limited.
For example
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, the flat which was made by its owner 20 years ago is different from a modern flat. The new flat has
lots
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 of
facilities
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 which make it more comfortable to live in.
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, electricity bills and other
government
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 problems are available in old
houses
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 which can not be seen in new buildings. The second reason includes
health
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issues
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 and modern
facilities
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. The old
houses
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 lack some
health
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facilities
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 like clean water, and fire and gas services.
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, if these
facilities
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 are absent in the traditional
houses
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, it will create barriers to living there.
However
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, there are
lots
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 of companies for repairing it and providing extra services but it costs the owner and needs
lots
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 of time.
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, if someone purchases an old one, he should first think about repairing it
instead
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 of living there because it is not more comfortable for life.
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,
people
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 can achieve
house
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 history by asking questions and looking at the flat as well.
Further
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, there are some technology applications that give information about the
house
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 age.
Overall
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,
people
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 have several causes for searching for
house
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 history
such
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 as old flat drawbacks,
government
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issues
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 as well and
health
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facilities
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, and
people
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 can get
house
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 information by asking or applying technologies.
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