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Some People claims that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement.

#people #claims #waste #homes #governments #requirement
Some
people
 say that
,
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 not enough of the
waste
 from
The
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Homes
are
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 recycled and the only way to speed up the process of recycling
of
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waste
 is to implement strict laws by
government
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.
This
 essay strongly agrees with the
above mentioned
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view point
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 and will
further
 elaborate that via
3
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R'S
that
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 is reduce, recycle and reuse we can easily handle our
homes
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waste
.
Along with
 that,
distribution
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 of
dustbin
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 can
also
 help in
this
 regard. From
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very
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 early time, it has been said that we can properly manage the dumping material by following
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three
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 R's which stand for reduce, reuse and recycle. But the issue is, it's very hard to implement that. So, it requires extra effort from the authorities to implement
the
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strict laws like fines,
imprisonment
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on
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general
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 public
those
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who do not follow these rules. The steps will surely help to attain
target
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 of recycling.
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, officials of
respective
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the respective
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department
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 should make categories of fines and other strict actions
according to
 the
waste
 of the
homes
 and the shops and in case someone
do
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 not follow these rules he/she should be dealt
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.
Furthermore
,
recycling
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 process could
also
 be
speed
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 up by
public
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a public
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 awareness drive. Arranging seminars in schools and colleges about
the
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waste
 disposal and
by
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distributing dustbins to collect recyclable items will help a lot in
this
 regard. As most of the community like to participate in
such
event
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events
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 about cleanliness,
so
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these
people
 will definitely help the authorities to spread the message of dumping, reusing and recycling the
wastes
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waste
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 from
the
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homes
.
For instance
, more than 50% of the
waste
 of the community was recycled in
area
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the area
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due to
cleanliness
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the cleanliness
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 drive by local
people
. So
overall
, I suggest that government either needs to impose strict rules or they need to check daily progress
report
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reports
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 about
recycling
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the recycling
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 process in order to handle
waste
 from the home, they can
also
 train local
people
 for
this
 purpose.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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