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Increasing travels between countries enables people to learn different cultures or to increase tension between people from different countries?

#countries #people #cultures #tension
In my opinion, increasing travel between
countries
 brings both positive and negative effects, which
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 having opportunities to learn
different
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about different
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 cultures and increasing tension in some cases. On
one
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the one
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 hand, travelling to another country will help to experience their culture
such
 as lifestyle, cuisine and costumes.
For example
, in Islamic
countries
, women must dress more discreetly than
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in other
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countries
 and
Muslim
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Muslims
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 do not eat pork
due to
 the notion that pork is not clean.
This
 can lead to the fact that travelling to other
countries
 can make others understand the culture and origin of Muslims.
Therefore
, international tourism can foster cultural exchange, understanding, and tolerance.
Furthermore
, it can help break down stereotypes, promote empathy, and build connections between people from different backgrounds.
On the other hand
, in several cases, global travel can cause tensions between citizens living in cultures that are too different. A few reasons for
this
 may be language barriers and unfamiliarity with local customs,
this
 can create misunderstandings or conflicts sometimes.
Moreover
, incidents of discrimination, xenophobia, or cultural insensitivity can occur when people from different cultures interact without proper knowledge or understanding.
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, international travel has
just
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apply
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had benefits and harm to each individual,
countries
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country
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 and the globe.
This
 depends on the ability and knowledge of each person.
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