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It is better for students to study from home rather than go to school. Do you agree or disagree with the statement.

It is thought that studying is crucial
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students
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 and some people think that education from
home
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 is the best option
whereas
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others
assumpt
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assume
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 to
school
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 much better.
This
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disagree
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 with the statement and there are some reasons.
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 with,
study
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 can be easier and faster if you have some guilders or teachers. Education can be seen as the most important source of each body because of its crucial but
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teenagers who are in their adolescence
can
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 not aware
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 and really abandon
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their
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study
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studies
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.
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, they need someone to force them
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study
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.
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, pupils in primary
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 who called children really keen on playing or something else more interesting than theory
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they
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will spend most of
time
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their time
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to phay
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playing
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instead
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 of studying.
Besides
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study
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the study
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 environment or peer pressure in
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 positive way can make you feel like you need to
study
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 now or you will lose
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your score In general,
students
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 are addicted to smartphones or technology equipment so if they
study
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 at
home
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, their concentration will be on their smartphones. Take covid-19 pandemic as an example,
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students
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 who studied online have virtual
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scores
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 and when they come back
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school
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 they do not have any knowledge about their lessons so it can be seen as knowledge gaps of
students
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 in
these year
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.
Moreover
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, you can make more friends if you
study
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 at
school
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instead
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 of studying at
home
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 In conclusion, if
students
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 want to
study
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 from
home
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, they need to have discipline and self-
study
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 spirit. From my point of
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students
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 should adapt to
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study
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the study
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 environment and go to
school
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.

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