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It is better for students to study from home rather than go to school. Do you agree or disagree with the statement.

#students #study #home #school
It is thought that studying is crucial
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students
 and some people think that education from
home
 is the best option
whereas
the
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others
assumpt
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assume
go
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going
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 to
school
 much better.
This
 writer totally
disagree
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 with the statement and there are some reasons.
To begin
 with,
study
 can be easier and faster if you have some guilders or teachers. Education can be seen as the most important source of each body because of its crucial but
with
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teenagers who are in their adolescence
can
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 not aware
that
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 and really abandon
with
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their
study
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studies
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.
Therefore
, they need someone to force them
in
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to
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study
.
For instance
, pupils in primary
school
 who called children really keen on playing or something else more interesting than theory
and
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they
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will spend most of
time
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their time
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to phay
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playing
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instead
 of studying.
Besides
,
study
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the study
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 environment or peer pressure in
the
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 positive way can make you feel like you need to
study
 now or you will lose
with
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your score In general,
students
 are addicted to smartphones or technology equipment so if they
study
 at
home
, their concentration will be on their smartphones. Take covid-19 pandemic as an example,
students
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Students
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 who studied online have virtual
score
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scores
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 and when they come back
school
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to school
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 they do not have any knowledge about their lessons so it can be seen as knowledge gaps of
students
 in
these year
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this year
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.
Moreover
, you can make more friends if you
study
 at
school
instead
 of studying at
home
 In conclusion, if
students
 want to
study
 from
home
, they need to have discipline and self-
study
 spirit. From my point of
view
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students
 should adapt to
study
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the study
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 environment and go to
school
.
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