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It is better for students to study from home rather than go to school. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#students #study #home #school
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 modern
time
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, education become more and more important in their life. Around
this
 issue, many people
believed
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 that studying at home
bring
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brings
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 more benefits than at
school
. From my point of view, I totally disagree with
this
 statement. First of all, studying at
school
 will create
the
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 supportive atmosphere which can help you
on
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 the process of learning. It is undeniable that studying at
institution
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an institution
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 with the guidance of a cluster
of
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can help learners
pratice
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practice
practise
 their discipline. For
an
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instance, during the COVID-19 period, all of the
school
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schools
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 must be closed by the impact of
this
 pandemic. For that reason,
students
 had to study online at home through a
screne
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screen
 of
laptop
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the laptop
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, TV,
mobile
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or mobile
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 phone
instead
 of going to
school
.
Although
this
 method can maintain the study of them, it
also
bring
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brings
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the
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disadvantages for the teachers
on
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in
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 managing their
students
. One of these is that nobody can guarantee that their
students
 focus on the lesson all
the
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day without doing anything else. Another point worth considering is that going to
school
help
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helps
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students
 advance themselves. When people go to
school
, they easily gain useful knowledge and ask the teacher
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the
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questions which
you
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they
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 can not understand. Not only that,
school
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the school
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also
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is also
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the
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a
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 place where you can make friends with people from
other area
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another area
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 of
country
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the country
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. For
an
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example, when you study at the boarding
school
, you can communicate with new friends from many provinces
on
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 your country. It can help you know about the culture and cuisine in many regions of your nation. Taking everything into consideration, learning at home
also
play
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plays
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 a crucial role in their life but it can not
comparison
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be compared
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 with the benefits of going to
school
 because of awareness and communication. Let’s
joing
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join
 the class at
school
 if
you
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apply
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possible.
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