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The table and chart below give information on police budget

The table and chart below give information on police budget
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The table below illustrates the
sources
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 of Britain's
police
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budget
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,
while
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 the pie charts show how
this
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 mentioned
budget
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 was spent during 2017 and 2018.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that in both 2017 and 2018, the national government and other
sources
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 have the largest and smallest proportion in the
budget
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's
sources
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 and generally all
police
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budget
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sources
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 increased over
this
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 period.
On the other hand
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, salaries and technology have the highest and lowest percentages of the expenses of Britain
police
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, respectively. By Looking at the
police
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budget
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 table, we can see that in 2017 the Britain
police
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budget
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 from the national government was 175.5
m
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 and with a slight increase it became 177.8
m
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 in 2018.
In addition
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, the local taxes increased from 91.2
m
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 in 2017 to 102.3
m
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 in the next year. Other
sources
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 had a negligible increase and reached 38.5
m
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 in 2018. On the other side,
however
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, 75 % of the
police
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budget
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 was spent on salaries in 2017, it decreased and became 69% of the total
budget
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 in the next year.
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, the percentage of buildings and transportation groups stood at the same percentage which was 17%.
Finally
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, in 2017, the share of technology in the
budget
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 was only 8% which increased to 14% in 2018.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, police, budget, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allocation
  • budgetary constraints
  • community policing
  • economic conditions
  • expenditures
  • funding allocation
  • governmental policies
  • operational efficiency
  • personnel costs
  • public safety
  • resource allocation
  • revenue sources
  • surveillance technology
  • trend analysis
  • fiscal responsibility
  • capital investments
  • public sector spending
  • crime rate
  • policy reform
  • infrastructure upgrades
  • staff training
  • emergency response capabilities
  • fiscal year
  • financial oversight
  • budget cuts
  • incremental increase
  • law enforcement agencies
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