Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There are many underdeveloped

countries

in the world. Many believe that a method to solve

this

problem would be giving financials to

those nation

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.

However

, it is my personal opinion that that sentiment is faulty, and

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essay will

eloquate

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eloquent

on why

i

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think so.

To begin

with, the problem that many poorer

countries

faces

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can't only be solved with money. A popular saying that relates to

this

is: "Give a man a fish and you feed him for a day. Teach a man how to feed and you feed him for a lifetime". The issue lies in many things

where

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riches can't solve.

For example

, a faulty education system leads to

lack

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a lack

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of manpower,

underdeveloped

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and underdeveloped

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social systems result in lower

qualities

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quality

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of life and

overall

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lack of enthusiasm. It should be noted that these are underlying problems that require systematic changes, not simply financial. Other than that, it should be noted that there are other reasons why giving money to poorer

countries

are

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ultimately ineffective. First and foremost, there

are

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no guarantee that

such

funds will be used to

further

the development of these

countries

, as embezzlement and corruption are

also

latent problems in poorer

countries

.

Secondly

, the acts

promotes

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a relationship in which the richer country becomes the "provider", which can be used against the nation that receives the charity.

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last

but not least, these funds make the recipient

dependant

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on the larger nation, which usually results in assimilation

to

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the larger country. All in all, it is

on

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my

beliefs

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belief

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that simply giving aid to poor

countries

' finances is not a move

that is

effective in the long run.

Although

it certainly does help,

i

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believe that developed

countries

should

also

help by encouraging

further

engagement with said nations, through

collaberations

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collaboration

collaborations

, communication and foreign relations. These actions will prove to be more beneficial to both the provider and the receiver.